Bike Sale... So What Am I Doing Wrong?

[Pickle]

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6) Slim the whole advert down, if folk are initially interested they will ask about the detail

Bob, I thought you'd appreciate this ad for one of the cars I'm looking to replace my bike with.
I know you said MY original ad was effectively a bit wordy but this is something else..... :z
http://www.ebay.co.uk/itm/140820353487?s...067wt_1186
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Mate, I take it all back. She takes the Olympic Gold for that one!!!